Allow Characters to Feel Their Feelings

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We authors have a few tricks at our disposal to tell characters’ feelings. These techniques are fast and easy. They get the job done … or do they? The question is what job gets done and for whom?

Job done for author. The author can approach his deadline quicker, keep down word count, and get on with the plot.

Job done for reader. The reader must conjure up what the feeling looks like, is distanced from the character, and gives fewer stars in his review.

First, what are these techniques and, second, how can writers do a better job?

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Naming a feeling

The author tells the reader the character is sad, angry, frustrated, scared, etc.

  • Sad, Annie turned and walked away.
  • Anger coursed through Fiona.
  • Millie feared what would happen.

The reader searches his feelings bank and tries to imagine what sad, anger, or fear looks like for this particular instance and for this particular character.

Using a prepositional phrase to name the feeling

Sometimes an author thinks he’s showed a feeling by couching the feeling in a prepositional phrase using such prepositions as with, in, or of.

  • Annie was filled with sadness.
  • Fiona made her decision in anger.
  • Millie experienced a feeling of fear at what could happen.

Add a strong verb in naming the feeling.

Sometimes an author thinks she’s solved the telling problem by adding a strong verb.

  • Sadness seeped through Annie.
  • Anger raced inside Fiona.
  • Fear zinged Millie’s heart.

Using made or caused.

Sometimes an author thinks he’s showing if he tells what made or caused the feeling.

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 His harsh words made Annie sad.
• The pitiable choices available caused Fiona’s anger.
• The gorilla made her happy.

 

 

How to Bring Feelings Alive Without Naming Them

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  1. Show what happens to people physically when they have the feeling.
  2. Give thoughts to the character that go along with the feeling.
  3. Give your characters behaviors and actions people do when they experience that feeling.

Examples

1. Cade read the letter reporting Gram’s death and was filled with sadness.

Cade read the letter reporting Gram’s death. His heart so heavy he could barely breathe, he raised his gaze to the old family photo on the mantel. Out of all the grandchildren, Gram’s hands rested on his young shoulders. His shoulders now warmed then cooled. Had Gram stopped for one final visit before going to Jesus? He looked back at the letter. A tear dropped onto her name and dissolved the ink into a blur.

2. Jake’s aloofness made Lauren angry, and she left infuriated.

Heat climbed Lauren’s neck. Just who did the creep think he was? Ignore her? How about this? She marched past him, making sure her handbag rammed him in the gut.

3. Sandy feared the look in Slade’s eyes.

Sandy stepped back, her heart pounding her ribcage. What was going on in Slade’s mind behind his smoldering gaze? Could she get to the door before he did?

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6 thoughts on “Allow Characters to Feel Their Feelings

  1. pamelasthibodeaux

    Great advice and examples, Zoe!
    I’ll definitely keep this in mind when writing & editing.
    Good luck and God’s blessings
    PamT

     
     
    1. Thanks, Pam.

       
       
  2. Great examples. I clicked to tweet!

     
     
    1. Thanks for tweeting, Sally Jo.

       
       
  3. Susan Anne Mason

    Great reminder! One I needed. Thank you!

     
     
    1. I need the reminder, too, Susan.

       
       

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