Write Numbers Right in Fiction

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Zoe’s book, Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript in 30 Days, is a fresh and innovative refocusing of your novel or novella. Through a few simple—and fun—steps, Zoe helps writers take their not-ready-for-publication and/or rejected manuscripts to a spit-polish finish. Writing is hard work, yes, but it doesn’t have to be difficult. —Eva Marie Everson, best-selling and multiple award-winning author, conference director, president of Word Weavers International, Inc.

Learn more at the end of the post.

For writing numbers for fiction (opposed to articles), my best advice to you is to read this comprehensive article by Fiction Editor Beth Hill. 

I also read through many of Hill’s answers to the comments and questions she received. Check those out too. Below I give you examples for correct forms of numbers for fiction I found interesting.

General Numbers


Jeremy’s tally showed 31,102 people attended the concert. (For numbers greater than 100)

Thirty-one thousand one hundred two people attended the concert. (Never start a sentence with a numeral.)

Jeremy learned fifty-five people attended the party. (Numbers from zero through one hundred.)


“I learned thirty-one thousand one hundred two people attended the concert,” Jeremy said. (less common and more formal for dialogue)

“I learned thirty-one thousand one hundred and two people attended the concert,” Jeremy said. (more common for dialogue)



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Jeremy arrived at 5:32 p.m. Jess entered at 6:00 a.m. (only one period)

Jeremy arrived at four o’clock. Jess arrived at nine. Elle showed up at ten fifteen.

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“Jeremy arrived at nine p.m. He left the next morning at eight and arrived home at one thirty,” said Paul. “It’s two twenty-three now.”


The head officer told them they’d rise at 0600.


“Men, you will rise at zero six hundred,” the head officer said.

Mom gave me a stern look. “You will rise at oh six hundred.”

Narrative and Dialogue:

His two o’clock appointment arrived on time. But his three o’clock never showed up. (no hyphens)



Sandy hunted for 638 Hemingway Drive.


“I’m hunting for Six thirty-eight Hemingway Drive, but can’t find it.

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Hill said that Route 66 is a name and can be used in this format for both narrative and dialogue.


Jeremy turned onto Route 66.


“I always take Route 66.” (Same logic for a TV Channel. “I like the news on Channel 5.”)


Narrative: For encouragement, Jeremy brought up Romans 8:28 and Jeremiah 29:11.

Dialogue: “For encouragement, look up Romans eight twenty-eight and Jeremiah twenty-nine eleven.”

What number rule from Hill’s article did you find helpful?

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—Diana L. Flegal, literary agent, and freelance editor

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—Yvonne Lehman, award-winning, best-selling author of 48 novels

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—Denise K. Loock, freelance editor, lightningeditingservices.com

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— Jamie West, editor coordinator, Pelican Book Group

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—Tanya Hanson, “Writing the Trails to Tenderness,” author of Christmas Lights, Outlaw Heart, Hearts Crossing Ranch anthology, and coming in 2019, Tainted Lady, Heart of Hope, and Angel Heart. www.tanyahanson.com

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–Erin Unger, author of Practicing Murder, releasing in 2019

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  1. Jane 3

    Zoe, you have such amazing attention to detail! My head swims with all of that.
    Of course, that is what makes your book so valuable.
    Thank you!

    • Zoe M. McCarthy

      Hi Jane, I often write about what I’m working and researching at the moment. What I’m working on now has a lot of numbers. Beth Hill’s post has helped me so much.

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