Write Numbers Right in Fiction

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Zoe’s book, Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript in 30 Days, is a fresh and innovative refocusing of your novel or novella. Through a few simple—and fun—steps, Zoe helps writers take their not-ready-for-publication and/or rejected manuscripts to a spit-polish finish. Writing is hard work, yes, but it doesn’t have to be difficult. —Eva Marie Everson, best-selling and multiple award-winning author, conference director, president of Word Weavers International, Inc.

Learn more at the end of the post.

For writing numbers for fiction (opposed to articles), my best advice to you is to read this comprehensive article by Fiction Editor Beth Hill. 

I also read through many of Hill’s answers to the comments and questions she received. Check those out too. Below I give you examples for correct forms of numbers for fiction I found interesting.

General Numbers

Narrative:

Jeremy’s tally showed 31,102 people attended the concert. (For numbers greater than 100)

Thirty-one thousand one hundred two people attended the concert. (Never start a sentence with a numeral.)

Jeremy learned fifty-five people attended the party. (Numbers from zero through one hundred.)

Dialogue:

“I learned thirty-one thousand one hundred two people attended the concert,” Jeremy said. (less common and more formal for dialogue)

“I learned thirty-one thousand one hundred and two people attended the concert,” Jeremy said. (more common for dialogue)

Time

Narrative:

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Jeremy arrived at 5:32 p.m. Jess entered at 6:00 a.m. (only one period)

Jeremy arrived at four o’clock. Jess arrived at nine. Elle showed up at ten fifteen.

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Dialogue

“Jeremy arrived at nine p.m. He left the next morning at eight and arrived home at one thirty,” said Paul. “It’s two twenty-three now.”

Narrative:

The head officer told them they’d rise at 0600.

Dialogue:

“Men, you will rise at zero six hundred,” the head officer said.

Mom gave me a stern look. “You will rise at oh six hundred.”

Narrative and Dialogue:

His two o’clock appointment arrived on time. But his three o’clock never showed up. (no hyphens)

Address

Narrative:

Sandy hunted for 638 Hemingway Drive.

Dialogue:

“I’m hunting for Six thirty-eight Hemingway Drive, but can’t find it.

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Hill said that Route 66 is a name and can be used in this format for both narrative and dialogue.

Narrative:

Jeremy turned onto Route 66.

Dialogue:

“I always take Route 66.” (Same logic for a TV Channel. “I like the news on Channel 5.”)

Scripture

Narrative: For encouragement, Jeremy brought up Romans 8:28 and Jeremiah 29:11.

Dialogue: “For encouragement, look up Romans eight twenty-eight and Jeremiah twenty-nine eleven.”

What number rule from Hill’s article did you find helpful?

Buy Page

I finished reading Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript in 30 Days. I have AND will highly recommend it to anyone who dabbles in fiction. It’s one of the best “how to” books I’ve ever read.

—Marsha Hubler, Director Montrose Christian Writers Conference

If you want to increase your chance of hearing yes instead of sorry or not a fit for our list at this time, this book is for you. If you want to develop stronger story plots with characters that are hard to put down, this book is for you. Through McCarthy’s checklists and helpful exercises and corresponding examples, you will learn how to raise the tension, hone your voice, and polish your manuscript. I need this book for my clients and the many conferees I meet at writer’s conferences around the country. Thank you, Zoe. A huge, #thumbsup, for Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript in 30 Days.  

—Diana L. Flegal, literary agent, and freelance editor

Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript is a self-editing encyclopedia! Each chapter sets up the targeted technique, examples show what to look for in your manuscript, then proven actions are provided to take your writing to the next level. Whether you are a seasoned writer or a newbie, you need this book! 

—Sally Shupe, freelance editor, aspiring author

Need to rework your book? Zoe M. McCarthy’s step-by-step reference guide leads you through the process, helping you fight feeling overwhelmed and wrangle your manuscript into publishable shape in 30 days. Tailor Your Manuscript delivers a clear and comprehensive action plan.

—Elizabeth Spann Craig, Twitteriffic owner, bestselling cozy mystery author of the “Myrtle Clover Mysteries,” the “Southern Quilting Mysteries,” and the “Memphis Barbeque Mysteries,” http://elizabethspanncraig.com/blog/  

Zoe has developed a guiding resource for beginning writers. Her method is designed for brainstorming, shaping, and revising the early draft of a manuscript. General and specific tips are offered for applying rules of writing to enhance one’s story for a workable second draft. By exploring the plot line of Love Comes Softly, writers may examine their own work for stronger plot and characterization. Valuable tools are offered that enable the writer to develop a workable draft in only 30 days!

—Yvonne Lehman, award-winning, best-selling author of 48 novels

Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript in 30 Days is chock-full of practical techniques. Numerous examples clarify problem areas and provide workable solutions. The action steps and blah busters McCarthy suggests will help you improve every sentence, every paragraph of your novel. If you follow her advice and implement her strategies, a publisher will be much more likely to issue you a contract.

—Denise K. Loock, freelance editor, lightningeditingservices.com

A concise, detailed, step by step resource for all writers. 

— Jamie West, editor coordinator, Pelican Book Group

Zoe’s writing blog has always intrigued me. As a high school English teacher, I can attest that her tips on good grammar and her hints for excellent sentence and paragraph structure are spot on. But as an author, I also appreciate her ever-present advice that excellent skills are not enough: you must tell a good story, too. This book clearly shows how to do it all.

—Tanya Hanson, “Writing the Trails to Tenderness,” author of Christmas Lights, Outlaw Heart, Hearts Crossing Ranch anthology, and coming in 2019, Tainted Lady, Heart of Hope, and Angel Heart. www.tanyahanson.com

McCarthy crafted an amazing self-help book that will strengthen any writer, whether new or seasoned, with guidance and self-evaluation tools.

–Erin Unger, author of Practicing Murder, releasing in 2019

Christmas Scavenger Hunt Round-Robin: The Gift of the Magpie

Christmas greetings! I hope you’re enjoying the Christmas Scavenger Hunt Round-Robin and learning about many Christmas books. If you’re starting here at my blog, that’s fine. I’ll give you the next author’s link. You need to visit every author’s site in the round-robin to qualify for the chance to win an Amazon gift card: $350 for first place, $250 for second place, or $150 for third place. The event officially runs December 6-12, 2020.

Thank you, for the opportunity to share about my book Gift of the Magpie. I love to talk about my tender and humorous Christmas romance that proves opposites distract.

English teacher and award-winning author of middle-grade adventure books for boys, Amanda Larrowe, is holed up in her house a few days before Christmas to meet a book deadline. But when she spots photographer, Camden Lancaster, moving in across the street, she’s horrified. Now that he’s knocked on her door and doesn’t recognize her as the girl he humiliated after their perfect high school Valentine’s Day date, she thinks it’s safe to be his fair-weather neighbor. Boy is she wrong.

I had fun writing this book. The characters were so real to me that writing their banter, Amanda’s struggles, and the humor came naturally to me.

Let’s continue the scavenger hunt. Go to Gift of the Magpie on Amazon at this link.

Find the answer to the question below by clicking on the book cover under “Look Inside,” which will give you a preview of Gift of the Magpie.

When Cam knocks on Amanda’s door, what liquid does she suspect his heart pumps?

When you’ve spotted the answer, go to the entry form, fill in the information and move on to the next blog given below!

I appreciate your visit! The next author on the tour is Rosey Lee, who tells about her Christmas book, Beautiful, Complicated Family. You can find it at this link. Remember, you must answer every question from all 37 authors in the scavenger hunt and that the round-robin ends on December 12, 2020 at 11:59 p.m. EST.

Seasons for Writers: Saying Good-bye and Hello

Zoe’s book, Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript in 30 Days, is a fresh and innovative refocusing of your novel or novella. Through a few simple—and fun—steps, Zoe helps writers take their not-ready-for-publication and/or rejected manuscripts to a spit-polish finish. Writing is hard work, yes, but it doesn’t have to be difficult. —Eva Marie Everson, best-selling and multiple award-winning author, conference director, president of Word Weavers International, Inc.

Learn more at the end of the post.

Are you fighting against entering a new season in your writing journey? I hope my experience will give you ideas to consider as you say good-bye to a season and hello to a new season.

Recently, I knew to survive in my writing and speaking career, one or more of my projects had to go. I was trying to juggle too many major commitments. Important ones kept getting tabled. 

Major Writing and Speaking Commitments

  • Writing and teaching the weekly community Bible Study
  • Planning with a group of women a spiritual retreat for our community in which I’ll be the speaker
  • Re-editing and updating two books of contemporary Christian allegories that my business partner and husband will put on Amazon
  • Applying my editors edits to the book in a new romance series
  • Teaching writing workshops at conferences, writers’ groups, and in webinars to promote my book on writing
  • Writing a speculative novel that I sensed God put on my heart
  • Serving as treasurer on the board of a national writers group’s state chapter 
  • Doing my part in our crazy book promotion and marketing efforts

Letting Go

Overwhelmed, I knew I was overdue in sitting down with God to determine what he was calling me to do? Hadn’t I prayed about these activities and believed God had called me to pursue them? 

Through my conversation with God, I realized I was holding on to projects from prior God-directed seasons. I discerned from God that my calling priorities are:

  • Writing inspirational novels
  • teaching God’s word
  • teaching writing principles

During the last couple of years, I was to concentrate on scheduling conference and writers’ group workshops to present the book I’d written to help writers complete and tailor their manuscripts. Although I’m to continue to teach writing principles, the push was part of a past season. 

Two years ago, I’d discerned that in paying forward the writing help I’d received was to volunteer on the Virginia chapter’s board of a national writers organization. The responsibilities and tasks have grown over the two years. When I prayed about accepting another year on the board, God confirmed this season was complete and I was to step down.

Letting go of these two major commitments, will free much of my time. As the year closes, I’ve been energized to complete the speculative novel and work on the spiritual retreat next year. 

Welcoming a New Season

Then a couple of weeks ago, an email arrived offering me a new opportunity that would turn my writing and our marketing habits upside down. Through prayer, I discerned I was to accept the opportunity and revamp and focus my writing and marketing efforts into a new, more defined mold. 

I’ll have to learn to write faster. But once our learning curve is accomplished, my husband and I will be able to concentrate our marketing into two major activities—limiting the craziness we’ve experienced—for a greater return and reach … for a season.

What seems to be calling you to let go of old activities and enter into a new writing season?

Buy Page

I finished reading Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript in 30 Days. I have AND will highly recommend it to anyone who dabbles in fiction. It’s one of the best “how to” books I’ve ever read.

—Marsha Hubler, Director Montrose Christian Writers Conference

If you want to increase your chance of hearing yes instead of sorry or not a fit for our list at this time, this book is for you. If you want to develop stronger story plots with characters that are hard to put down, this book is for you. Through McCarthy’s checklists and helpful exercises and corresponding examples, you will learn how to raise the tension, hone your voice, and polish your manuscript. I need this book for my clients and the many conferees I meet at writer’s conferences around the country. Thank you, Zoe. A huge, #thumbsup, for Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript in 30 Days.  

—Diana L. Flegal, literary agent, and freelance editor

Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript is a self-editing encyclopedia! Each chapter sets up the targeted technique, examples show what to look for in your manuscript, then proven actions are provided to take your writing to the next level. Whether you are a seasoned writer or a newbie, you need this book! 

—Sally Shupe, freelance editor, aspiring author

Need to rework your book? Zoe M. McCarthy’s step-by-step reference guide leads you through the process, helping you fight feeling overwhelmed and wrangle your manuscript into publishable shape in 30 days. Tailor Your Manuscript delivers a clear and comprehensive action plan.

—Elizabeth Spann Craig, Twitteriffic owner, bestselling cozy mystery author of the “Myrtle Clover Mysteries,” the “Southern Quilting Mysteries,” and the “Memphis Barbeque Mysteries,” http://elizabethspanncraig.com/blog/  

Zoe has developed a guiding resource for beginning writers. Her method is designed for brainstorming, shaping, and revising the early draft of a manuscript. General and specific tips are offered for applying rules of writing to enhance one’s story for a workable second draft. By exploring the plot line of Love Comes Softly, writers may examine their own work for stronger plot and characterization. Valuable tools are offered that enable the writer to develop a workable draft in only 30 days!

—Yvonne Lehman, award-winning, best-selling author of 48 novels

Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript in 30 Days is chock-full of practical techniques. Numerous examples clarify problem areas and provide workable solutions. The action steps and blah busters McCarthy suggests will help you improve every sentence, every paragraph of your novel. If you follow her advice and implement her strategies, a publisher will be much more likely to issue you a contract.

—Denise K. Loock, freelance editor, lightningeditingservices.com

A concise, detailed, step by step resource for all writers. 

— Jamie West, editor coordinator, Pelican Book Group

Zoe’s writing blog has always intrigued me. As a high school English teacher, I can attest that her tips on good grammar and her hints for excellent sentence and paragraph structure are spot on. But as an author, I also appreciate her ever-present advice that excellent skills are not enough: you must tell a good story, too. This book clearly shows how to do it all.

—Tanya Hanson, “Writing the Trails to Tenderness,” author of Christmas Lights, Outlaw Heart, Hearts Crossing Ranch anthology, and coming in 2019, Tainted Lady, Heart of Hope, and Angel Heart. www.tanyahanson.com

McCarthy crafted an amazing self-help book that will strengthen any writer, whether new or seasoned, with guidance and self-evaluation tools.

–Erin Unger, author of Practicing Murder, releasing in 2019