2021 Christmas Scavenger Hunt Round-Robin: Gift of the Magpie

Christmas Greetings! I hope you’re enjoying the Christmas Scavenger Hunt Round Robin and learning about many Christmas books. If you’re starting here at my blog, that’s fine. I’ll give you the next author’s link below. You need to visit every author’s site in the round-robin to qualify for a chance to win an Amazon gift card: $250 first place, $150 second place, or $100 third place.The event officially ends at 11:59 p.m. EST on December 12, 2021. 

I love talking about book Gift of the Magpie.Thank you for giving me the chance to share about my tender and humorous Christmas romance that takes place in Richmond, Virginia.

English teacher and award-winning author of middle-grade adventure books for boys, Amanda Larrowe, is holed up in her house a few days before Christmas to meet a book deadline. But when she spots photographer, Camden Lancaster, moving in across the street, she’s horrified. Now that he’s knocked on her door and doesn’t recognize her as the girl he humiliated after their perfect high school Valentine’s Day date, she thinks it’s safe to be his fair-weather neighbor. Boy is she wrong!

I had fun writing this book. The characters were so real to me that writing their banter, Amanda’s struggles, and the humor came naturally to me.

Let’s continue the scavenger hunt. Go to Gift of the Magpie on Amazon at this link.

Find the answer to the question below by clicking on the book cover under “Look Inside,” which will give you a preview of Gift of the Magpie

What were the red and white candy canes doing on her laptop screen saver?

When you’ve spotted the answer, go to the entry form, fill in the information and move on to the next blog given below!

I appreciate your visit! The next author on the tour is Hallee Bridgeman, who tells about her Christmas book, Blizzard in the Bluegrass. You can find it at this link. Remember, you must answer every question from all 26 authors in the scavenger hunt and that the round-robin ends at 11:59 p.m. EST on December 12th.

The Word “That” – Let’s Look at That

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Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript in 30 Days is chock-full of practical techniques. Numerous examples clarify problem areas and provide workable solutions. The action steps and blah busters McCarthy suggests will help you improve every sentence, every paragraph of your novel. If you follow her advice and implement her strategies, a publisher will be much more likely to issue you a contract.

—Denise K. Loock, freelance editor, lightningeditingservices.com

See more about the book at the end of the post.

 

We’re told to get rid of as many “thats” as we can. Sometimes we can remove the word “that” and the meaning of the sentence doesn’t change. Other times we can rewrite a sentence and eliminate “that.” Sometimes, we need to keep “that” because the sentence won’t make sense without the word.

Ways the Word “That” Is Used

Dialogue

1. Natural: “I like all the options.” Tina pointed at a red dress. “But I’ll take that one.”

Could rewrite & remove: “I like all the options.” Tina pointed at a dress. “But I’ll take the red one.”

2. With “that” – gives punch: “Why’d you take the job?”

                                             “I need the money. That’s why.”

Without “that” – is explanatory: “Why’d you take the job?”

                                                 “Because I need the money.”

Rewrite and Remove

3. Wordy: Jace took the time that was needed to do the job.

Better: Jace took the time needed to do the job. 

4. So That: She tiptoed so that he wouldn’t hear her footsteps.

Better: She tiptoed so he wouldn’t hear her footsteps.

5. Unnecessary: He was so involved that he missed the point.

Better: He was so involved he missed the point.

6. “That repeated: He told her to sit three times. He said that he disliked repeating that.

Better: He told her to sit three times. He said he disliked repeating that.

Could rewrite: He told her to sit three times. He said he disliked repeating commands.

7. Unnecessary: Neither party was happy with the compromise that they’d reached.

Better: Neither party was happy with the compromise they’d reached.

Necessary or Useful

8. Wordy: He could build an empire, but building an empire would take a long time.

Better: He could build an empire, but that would take a long time.

9. Necessary: “Love Me Tender” was the one song that made her weep.

Removal doesn’t work: “Love Me Tender: was the one song made her weep.

Rewrite changes meaning: “Love Me Tender” made her weep.

10. Helpful connector: He guffawed. Jill raised her eyebrows at that but was grateful for his company.

May not connect guffaw and raised eyebrows: He guffawed. Jill raised her eyebrows but was grateful for his company.

If “that” isn’t a word you overuse, what pesky word sneaks into your writing too often?

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I finished reading Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript in 30 Days. I have AND will highly recommend it to anyone who dabbles in fiction. It’s one of the best “how to” books I’ve ever read.

—Marsha Hubler, Director Montrose Christian Writers Conference

If you want to increase your chance of hearing yes instead of sorry or not a fit for our list at this time, this book is for you. If you want to develop stronger story plots with characters that are hard to put down, this book is for you. Through McCarthy’s checklists and helpful exercises and corresponding examples, you will learn how to raise the tension, hone your voice, and polish your manuscript. I need this book for my clients and the many conferees I meet at writer’s conferences around the country. Thank you, Zoe. A huge, #thumbsup, for Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript in 30 Days.  

—Diana L. Flegal, literary agent, and freelance editor

Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript is a self-editing encyclopedia! Each chapter sets up the targeted technique, examples show what to look for in your manuscript, then proven actions are provided to take your writing to the next level. Whether you are a seasoned writer or a newbie, you need this book! 

—Sally Shupe, freelance editor, aspiring author

Need to rework your book? Zoe M. McCarthy’s step-by-step reference guide leads you through the process, helping you fight feeling overwhelmed and wrangle your manuscript into publishable shape in 30 days. Tailor Your Manuscript delivers a clear and comprehensive action plan.

—Elizabeth Spann Craig, Twitteriffic owner, bestselling cozy mystery author of the “Myrtle Clover Mysteries,” the “Southern Quilting Mysteries,” and the “Memphis Barbeque Mysteries,” http://elizabethspanncraig.com/blog/  

Zoe’s book, Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript in 30 Days, is a fresh and innovative refocusing of your novel or novella. Through a few simple—and fun—steps, Zoe helps writers take their not-ready-for-publication and/or rejected manuscripts to a spit-polish finish. Writing is hard work, yes, but it doesn’t have to be difficult.

—Eva Marie Everson, best-selling and multiple award-winning author, conference director, president of Word Weavers International, Inc.

A concise, detailed, step by step resource for all writers. 

— Jamie West, editor coordinator, Pelican Book Group

Zoe’s writing blog has always intrigued me. As a high school English teacher, I can attest that her tips on good grammar and her hints for excellent sentence and paragraph structure are spot on. But as an author, I also appreciate her ever-present advice that excellent skills are not enough: you must tell a good story, too. This book clearly shows how to do it all.

—Tanya Hanson, “Writing the Trails to Tenderness,” author of Christmas Lights, Outlaw Heart, Hearts Crossing Ranch anthology, and coming in 2019, Tainted Lady, Heart of Hope, and Angel Heart. www.tanyahanson.com

McCarthy crafted an amazing self-help book that will strengthen any writer, whether new or seasoned, with guidance and self-evaluation tools.

–Erin Unger, author of Practicing Murder, releasing in 2019

Zoe has developed a guiding resource for beginning writers. Her method is designed for brainstorming, shaping, and revising an early draft of a manuscript. General and specific tips are offered for applying rules of writing to enhance one’s story for a workable second draft. By exploring the plot line of Love Comes Softly writers may examine their own work for stronger plot and characterization. Valuable tools are offered that enable the writer to develop a workable draft in 30 days!

—Yvonne Lehman, award-winning, best-selling author of 48 novels

My Word Processor’s Thesaurus Is My Writing Friend, Ally, Pal …

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Zoe has developed a guiding resource for beginning writers. Her method is designed for brainstorming, shaping, and revising an early draft of a manuscript. General and specific tips are offered for applying rules of writing to enhance one’s story for a workable second draft. By exploring the plot line of Love Comes Softly writers may examine their own work for stronger plot and characterization. Valuable tools are offered that enable the writer to develop a workable draft in 30 days! —Yvonne Lehman, award-winning, best-selling author of 48 novels

Learn more at the end of the post.

 

When I’m writing a novel or nonfiction, I click on words and press my shortcut keys to pop up the dictionary/thesaurus for that word. I perform this action several times in an hour and peruse all possible options, because only one or two substitutes for my word will work best.

If you haven’t already, I suggest you find the magic, multi-finger shortcut that summons your word processor’s dictionary/thesaurus quickly. If it’s easy to get to, you’re more likely to use the resource.

Reasons Why My Thesaurus Is My Friend

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  • In a paragraph, I don’t want to use the same word twice if possible. To the reader, this feels repetitive and colorless.
  • I want to choose the word that’s most correct for what I’m trying to convey.
  • I want to create vivid pictures in my reader’s imagination.

 

How I Use My Thesaurus to Discover the Best Word 

Let’s look at friend for an example. Here are some of the words listed in my thesaurus for friend. Test if they give you a better image than friend.

Friend

  • Companion Use for a secondary character who accompanies the protagonist often at events or on trips or use for a character’s spouse.

Example: Grady is a wealthy executive. 

“Chase, my friend, would you call my wife and tell her we needed to extend our trip?” Grady turned to the bellhop and slipped him a couple of bills. “That’s for my companion’s luggage as well. He’s in room forty-two.”

  • Confidant Try this word for characters so close they divulge their deepest secrets to each other.

Example: Kelly is a fifty-year-old divorcé. 

Kelly dabbed tears as she speed-dialed Linda. Linda answered on the second ring. “Oh, Linda, I need my confidant. Chet called off our date.”

  • Soul mate Employ this moniker for a man or a woman who is suited for the other.

 

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Example: Riley is a soldier overseas who faithfully writes Julie. 

Julie held Riley’s letter to her bosom and performed a pirouette. With over three-hundred shared letters they’d become soul mates. 

  • Playmate Use this word when writing about children who play together on the school playground or at each other’s homes.

Example: Jill and Missy are in the same first grade class.

“Mrs. Crump, here’s my list of rules for Jill while I’m gone. She may have Missy come over for a playdate on Tuesday. She’s Jill’s playmate from school.”

  • Ally Good word for characters taking sides.

Example: At work, Amanda disagrees with her boss’s idea. 

Reed joined the discussion. “I think Amanda makes a valid point.” 

Amanda’s shoulders relaxed. Finally, she had an ally.

  • Pal This is a good word for hinting at the opposite of friend. 

Example: Male characters disagree. 

“You need glasses, pal. My serve was in.” 

  • Buddy If two are good friends, characters would use this more casual reference.

Example: Allie has fallen in love with Kyle, but he’s clueless. 

Allie returned Kyles’s wave. Would she ever be more than his fist-bumping buddy?

  • Sidekick Use for friends who aren’t equals, i.e. one is more of a supporter.

Example: Kara is director Gena’s assistant for a citywide event. 

“Kara is my sidekick. She’s as loyal to me as Sancho Panza was to Don Quixote.

What techniques do you rely on to add vivid words to your writing?

Buy Page

I finished reading Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript in 30 Days. I have AND will highly recommend it to anyone who dabbles in fiction. It’s one of the best “how to” books I’ve ever read.

—Marsha Hubler, Director Montrose Christian Writers Conference

If you want to increase your chance of hearing yes instead of sorry or not a fit for our list at this time, this book is for you. If you want to develop stronger story plots with characters that are hard to put down, this book is for you. Through McCarthy’s checklists and helpful exercises and corresponding examples, you will learn how to raise the tension, hone your voice, and polish your manuscript. I need this book for my clients and the many conferees I meet at writer’s conferences around the country. Thank you, Zoe. A huge, #thumbsup, for Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript in 30 Days.  

—Diana L. Flegal, literary agent, and freelance editor

Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript is a self-editing encyclopedia! Each chapter sets up the targeted technique, examples show what to look for in your manuscript, then proven actions are provided to take your writing to the next level. Whether you are a seasoned writer or a newbie, you need this book! 

—Sally Shupe, freelance editor, aspiring author

Need to rework your book? Zoe M. McCarthy’s step-by-step reference guide leads you through the process, helping you fight feeling overwhelmed and wrangle your manuscript into publishable shape in 30 days. Tailor Your Manuscript delivers a clear and comprehensive action plan.

—Elizabeth Spann Craig, Twitteriffic owner, bestselling cozy mystery author of the “Myrtle Clover Mysteries,” the “Southern Quilting Mysteries,” and the “Memphis Barbeque Mysteries,” http://elizabethspanncraig.com/blog/  

Zoe’s book, Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript in 30 Days, is a fresh and innovative refocusing of your novel or novella. Through a few simple—and fun—steps, Zoe helps writers take their not-ready-for-publication and/or rejected manuscripts to a spit-polish finish. Writing is hard work, yes, but it doesn’t have to be difficult.

—Eva Marie Everson, best-selling and multiple award-winning author, conference director, president of Word Weavers International, Inc.

Tailor Your Fiction Manuscript in 30 Days is chock-full of practical techniques. Numerous examples clarify problem areas and provide workable solutions. The action steps and blah busters McCarthy suggests will help you improve every sentence, every paragraph of your novel. If you follow her advice and implement her strategies, a publisher will be much more likely to issue you a contract.

—Denise K. Loock, freelance editor, lightningeditingservices.com

A concise, detailed, step by step resource for all writers. 

— Jamie West, editor coordinator, Pelican Book Group

Zoe’s writing blog has always intrigued me. As a high school English teacher, I can attest that her tips on good grammar and her hints for excellent sentence and paragraph structure are spot on. But as an author, I also appreciate her ever-present advice that excellent skills are not enough: you must tell a good story, too. This book clearly shows how to do it all.

—Tanya Hanson, “Writing the Trails to Tenderness,” author of Christmas Lights, Outlaw Heart, Hearts Crossing Ranch anthology, and coming in 2019, Tainted Lady, Heart of Hope, and Angel Heart. www.tanyahanson.com

McCarthy crafted an amazing self-help book that will strengthen any writer, whether new or seasoned, with guidance and self-evaluation tools.

–Erin Unger, author of Practicing Murder, releasing in 2019