How to Find the Amazing Word for That Thingy, Modifier, or Action

Flip Dictionary takes you from a “meaning” you are aware of to the “word” you need.” —Barbara Ann Kipfer, Ph.D.

 

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In a scene, my character senses a reverent atmosphere, but I didn’t want to use atmosphere. I couldn’t summon the word I wanted. Microsoft Word’s thesaurus offered ambiance, feeling, mood, and others. I knew a better word was available but my brain couldn’t capture it.

I looked up atmosphere in Flip Dictionary by Barbara Ann Kipfer, Ph.D.

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Image courtesy of fotographic1980 at FreeDigitalPhotos.net

Aura. That was it!

Under the word atmosphere, Kipfer listed 16 words for different kinds of atmosphere. For example: “atmosphere of special power or mystery: mystique.”

So, today I want to plug Flip Dictionary. Let’s look at some other examples. 

Example 1

How about courage. The thesaurus supplied: bravery, nerve, pluck, valor, daring, audacity, mettle, resolution, and guts.

As Flip Dictionary does, it named all of the above from a thesaurus and then added: backbone, boldness, braveness, chin up, élan, fearlessness, firmness, fortitude, gallantry, gameness, grit, gumption, hardihood, heart, the heart of a lion, heroism, prowess, soul, spine, spunk, and tenacity.

Wow. What a wealth of words to choose from. Some have a different meaning from, but are in the scope of, courage.

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Suppose my character is a boy who grabs a runaway dog’s leash and persists in pulling the resistant canine away from a busy street. I might use a form of:        

  • Grit – “courage and resolve; strength of character”
  • Gumption – “shrewd or spirited initiative and resourcefulness”
  • Heroism – “great bravery”
  • Spunk – “courage and determination”
  • Tenacity – “the quality or fact of being determined; determination”

(definitions from New Oxford American Dictionary)

I like spunk. I don’t think I’d use it for a man. Maybe for a grandmother or a young woman. If my story is folksy, I might employ gumption.

The point is Flip Dictionary gives me words that go beyond synonyms. I like that.

Example 2

What’s the bar thingy that holds flags so they hang across a porch?

I looked up flag, and beneath it I found:

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image by jill111

Flag hung on crosspiece, not pole: gonfalon”

gonfalon: “a banner or pennant, especially one with streamers, hung from a crossbar” (New Oxford American Dictionary)

Gonfalon was also listed under banner in Flip Dictionary.

If you can look up a clue to the thingy escaping you, often you’ll find it in Flip Dictionary.

An amazing resource that gives me words that go beyond synonyms. Click to tweet.

If you use another resource or Flip Dictionary, would you tell us about how you use it?

Turn Your Scene That’s Becoming a Cliché Into a Reader’s Surprise

“I look for ways to purposely write myself into corners and then use them to my advantage.” —Steven James (Writer’s Digest July/August 2015)

 

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While writing a scene, I realized it was turning into a cliché for a Christmas story. Snow falls and the couple builds a snowman or starts a snowball fight. I thought, “Will you, much less your readers, be satisfied with that?”

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Image by kerplode

To my surprise as I typed more words, the hero suggested a twist mid cliché. Something told me not to backspace through the paragraphs leading into the cliché activity. I allowed my hero to switch from the familiar pursuit to an activity I’d done in my past. Something most characters don’t do in a Christmas story.

Two benefits naturally emerged from my unique solution:

  1. I was forced to bring out much deeper character values than in the developing cliché. Better than the heroine squealing and yelling, “Don’t you dare hit me with that snowball!”
  1. By allowing the scene to head into a cliché, it became a red herring. I started out in one direction then orchestrated a switcheroo. Surprise! The bonus: the reader’s greater understanding of the characters’ values and characters.

I added this idea to my scene checklist:

Look for cliché activities and turn them into surprises for the reader. Click to tweet.

Example:

Sarah pulled herself into a sitting position and rested her back against the headboard. If she didn’t overcome this illness soon and help Clay in the fields, they’d lose much of the crop. They still didn’t know if the drought had hurt the wheat. As it was, the proceeds would barely be enough to pay their bills.

She slid her legs over the edge of the bed. When she stood, lightheadedness and nausea seized her, and her knees wobbled. She crawled into bed. Clay didn’t need to come home and find her on the floor. He already spent too much time worrying about her slow progress.

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image by Jan Temmel

As she stared out the window, a tear rolled to her jaw. In the distance, Clay strode in from the fields for lunch. She grabbed her comb from the bedside table and went to work on her tangled hair. Was that flowers he was carrying?

The door opened and paper rustled in the other room. What was Clay doing?

Clay clomped into the bedroom and held out the flowers concealed in a sheet of her drawing paper. His lips trembled, and he looked as if he’d cry at any moment. What had Clay done wrong that brought on rare tears and flowers?

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image by sushi

Studying his face for a clue, she accepted his guilt offering. Her fingers shook as she unwrapped a posy of … healthy green wheat.

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To me, a man bringing flowers to his sick wife is nice, but a little cliché-like. Making this activity a red herring for his wife and the reader will liven up the scene. Their actions say a lot about them and their relationship.

What are other cliché-like activities?

Actions Trump Thoughts & Feelings in Unveiling Character

“Characters reveal themselves more vividly in what they do and say than in what they think and feel.” —David Corbett

 

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Note the above quote from “Characters, Scene by Scene,” by David Corbett in the January 2015 Writer’s Digest issue. Corbett explains that actions show a character has made a choice. A character’s choices reveal values and character. Corbett also says thoughts and feelings can change, where as past actions can’t.

Corbett writes, “Our inner lives matter in exact proportion to how much they motivate what we do.”

My Examples

Background: Mr. Halbreth has offered Brent Russell a job in a remote African jungle. Brent will be separated from his wife, Sylvia, for six months.

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Sylvia’s Pure thoughts & feelings:

Six months without Brent? No job was worth that sacrifice. How could Brent even consider taking such a position? But he had. A knot formed in her throat. Brent was being selfish. What if she was terribly injured? Could Mr. Halbreth reach him? She swiped at tears. Right now, she could strangle Brent.

 

Sylvia is shocked, hurt, and angry, but these feelings could change. Do we really think she’ll strangle Brent?

Sylvia’s Pure Actions:

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Mr. Halbreth rose as Sylvia entered his office.

He gestured toward a chair. “Please sit, Mrs. Russell.”

She sat and crossed her legs. “I hope I’m doing the right thing, Mr. Halbreth.”

“What’s on your mind?”

“What I’m about to tell you, Mr. Halbreth, my husband would never reveal to you, because he wants the job.”

“We want him.”

Sylvia licked her lips. “Brent has a heart condition.”

Mr. Halbreth’s confident smile flattened.

Sylvia hurried on. “If he has a heart attack, he needs to be near a hospital equipped to save his life.”

“On his application, Brent indicated he had only borderline high blood pressure.”

“Of course, he would.” She stood. “I must go.” She captured his gaze. “Hopefully, you have an alternate candidate.”

Sylvia’s retreating, high-heeled footsteps echoed in the silence.

No matter what her thoughts or feelings are, Sylvia has gone behind Brent’s back to sabotage the offer.

Adding thoughts and feelings, could show how she’s betraying him. Possibly cold-bloodedly. Or desperately. Her talk about doing the right thing may be to draw Mr. Halbreth’s sympathy. Or she may mean it. Her statement about hoping Mr. Halbreth has an alternate candidate may show she expects him to rescind his offer. Or she’s sorry he’ll lose his best candidate.

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Sylvia’s Actions, Thoughts, and Feelings

Mr. Halbreth rose as Sylvia entered his office.

He gestured toward a chair. “Please sit, Mrs. Russell.”

She sat and crossed her legs. “I hope I’m doing the right thing, Mr. Halbreth.” Could he hear her heart thud as she did the hardest thing in her life?

“What’s on your mind?”

“What I’m about to tell you, Mr. Halbreth, my husband would never reveal to you, because he wants the job.”

“We want him.”

Sylvia licked her lips. This’s for us, Brent. “Brent has a heart condition.”

Mr. Halbreth’s confident smile flattened.

Sylvia hurried on. “If he has a heart attack, he needs to be near a hospital equipped to save his life.”

“On his application, Brent indicated he had only borderline high blood pressure.”

“Of course, he would.” Because it was true. But who knew, his pressure could rise out of control. She stood. “I must go.” She captured his gaze. “Hopefully, you have an alternate candidate.” Certainly, he’d find another qualified applicant.

Sylvia’s retreating, high-heeled footsteps echoed in the silence. She’d prepare Brent’s favorite lasagna dinner tonight.

In fiction, actions speak louder than thoughts & feelings; all are important. Click to tweet.

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