3 Tips to Edit Your Writing to Avoid a Reader’s “Huh?”

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“It’s no wonder that truth is stranger than fiction. Fiction has to make sense.”  —Mark Twain

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We know exactly what we mean when we write each sentence of our story. We’re surprised when our critique partner or editor doesn’t.

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Here are 3 tips that will improve the clearness of your writing.

Tip 1. Huh? That Couldn’t Happen.

When we put phrases in the wrong place or leave out words we can say something that’s impossible.

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Example: He’d forgotten to tell Alice he’d seen three wild turkeys playing golf the other day.

Turkeys playing golf? Huh?

Be careful in your rewrite or you may create a new problem. For example: He’d forgotten to tell Alice while playing golf the other day he’d seen three wild turkeys.

Golf-hating Alice played golf with him? Huh?

Better Rewrite: Earlier today, he’d forgotten to tell Alice he’d seen three wild turkeys on the golf course the other day.

Watch out for impossible actions in your writing.

Tip 2. Huh? What does “it” or “that” or “her/him” refer to?

Sometimes we use “it” or “that” or a pronoun that could refer to more than one thing or person.

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Example: She gaped. Maude had told Alex every detail about her past. Maude’s blabbermouth would someday get her in trouble. That hurt her now.

Huh? What hurt? Maude’s gossip, Maude’s blabbermouth, or Maude’s ending up in trouble? Whose past was it? [She]’s or Maude’s? And Maude’s blabbermouth would get whom in trouble? [She] or Maude? That hurt whom? [She] or maybe Maude through a tarnished reputation?

Better Rewrite: Amy gaped. Maude had told Alex every detail about Amy’s past. Maude’s blabbermouth would someday get Maude in trouble. Now, Maude’s gossip had destroyed Amy’s chances to marry Alex.

A lot of names. But the reader shouldn’t be confused now. We could revamp the paragraph to cut down some of the names.

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Tip 3. Huh? What did that sentence say?

We pack in several pieces of information and end up with a convoluted sentence.

Example: By reaching across the cement wall, Ziggy grabbed the Tiki torch Mom had put there with the hand she’d burned in last night’s fire lighting up the area with it to expose thieves climbing over it, snagging her sweater in the process.

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Huh? Who had the burned hand? And did the Tiki torch or the fire light up the area to expose thieves? Did thieves climb over the wall, the fire, or the Tiki torch? Who snagged her sweater?

Better Rewrite: Ziggy eyed the Tiki torch Mom had put near the wall to expose thieves entering the yard. She reached the hand she’d burned in last night’s fire across the cement wall and grabbed the torch, snagging her sweater in the process.

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What other tips do you have to help writers keep their writing clear?

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4 Comments

  1. anemulligan

    I don’t know if we’ll ever totally get rid of all the “huh” – even my editor had one. LOL I know we’re too close to our own work. I’ve got great crit partners and 2 fantastic beta readers, and nobody caught the “huh?” my editor caught. Go figure. 🙂

    • Zoe M. McCarthy

      That’s so true, Ane. And sometimes when I review the work after my great crit partner and editor have finished, I find something else!

  2. Jane Foard Thompson

    I find it helps to read it out loud. Your ear hears problems, and you often change the wording automatically, clarifying as you read.
    Even better is to have someone else read it out loud. You know what it is “supposed” to say, but someone reading blind will stumble on rough writing.
    Probably most important, when someone reads your work and says they don’t understand something, don’t explain it — change it!

    • Zoe M. McCarthy

      Jane, I use my computer “reader” to read it to me aloud. From his deadpan reading I catch a lot. When my crit partner :0), contest judge, or editor marks a spot of Huh?, I accept something is wrong. I may not use their suggestions of how to fix it, but I change what seems to be the source of the confusion.